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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Falldots
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    The Fall



    There was, once,
    When love traversed and transcended,
    Took itself to itself and soared on wings that were patterned by an unknown scribe
    On the eternal....
    And though it hungered and screamed for lips that could be burnt on the pyre of Passion, still would have savoured every second of it liquid dismantling to nakedness...
    And turned with those eternal eyes and saw inside you....
    And read the poetry of your heart...
    Even read and wrote the poems in your soul....
    Read through the barricades and traps,
    Evaded every confusions lancet..
    And simply saw...
    You ...
    Naked....

    This was, once...
    When love traversed and transcended ....
    Everything

    But such a fire in patency can only be held by the naked

    Ashes are where both the kindle and the fire

    Die




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