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    dots Submission Name: Where Not to Treaddots
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    Author: Soul-Hugger
    ASL Info:    31/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 123/53/31
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 21
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 700



    Description:
       I have tentatively called this one "Where Not to Tread." It was a poem I wrote about 2 years ago, but was lost when my ex, with whom I had generously shared five years of my life, destroyed my journals that contained all the poetry I had written in a space of four years. This frustrates me to no end, because I was putting together a manuscript, and there is no way I can remember them all. In this one, I cannot remember the beginning. But I hope with the telling, ideas will be reborn. I welcome thoughts of any kind. Don't know why I was driven to use the word "doth", but I thought it sounded better than "does."


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    .....These faithless faces crowd among us,
    Searching through us, never seeing;
    Ideas formed in fragile lifestream,
    Cemented soil with hidden seeds.

    For what doth sprout without a sprinkle,
    What doth crumble without pressure,
    Life brings forth in violent splendour,
    Tattered pieces out of order.

    Where do I fit among these shards,
    Unknowing forces cutting sharply,
    How do I help these broken people,
    Cradle them in unsure arms?

    Hold a shaking hand to steady,
    Lead them over faulty ground,
    Try to show not just the right path,
    But demonstrate where not to tread....




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