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Black and White

Author: Toosha
ASL Info:    18/f/SD
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 20 /13 /11
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Black and White

if my life was in black and white,
that would be perfectly fine with me
i would notice you from afar
full in color,
and you would light up my life
wash away my grey tears
with a kiss
full of passion and feeling
a feeling i have lost in this life.

Submitted on 2009-09-03 18:33:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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