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Together, Forever


Author: Toosha
ASL Info:    18/f/SD
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 20 /13 /11
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Together, Forever



i will lay awake
thinking of you tonight
as i have been
you're killing me
yet saving me
all at once
i feel relieved
and
torn
all at once
its all so crazy
but im addicted
to the thought
of you and me
together
forever




Submitted on 2009-09-03 18:35:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like this poem. your words speak volumes.
| Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by mimis043 | [ Reply to This ]


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