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    dots Submission Name: colddots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Come on, take a step closer
    I will be your martyr.
    Can you see the blood trails,
    Hidding away the details.
    Going through my broken skin,
    cursing me from within.


    (Why)
    Did you leave me here?
    (try)
    To find you near
    (cold)
    I feel so dead, inside my fears.

    Hold on another second
    I feel so alone
    Can you feel my heart beat?
    all the way through my chest
    It calls, For you name
    It begs to hear your voice

    But you seem so far away.
    are you even in here?

    (why)
    Did you leave me here?
    (try)
    to find you near
    (fall)
    Into a lake of my tears




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      Wow, you are way deep. If like I suspect and you are writing from real life experience, I can really relate. I hope in that case you are the pick yourself up and try again type. I believe you are. 90% of my writiing comes from something bad, so writing is my therapy.
    At the end of the day I wouldn't change a
    thing, they make me the character I am.
    I love being me, even when I'm a mess!
    Thanks for your comments on Lady In White.
    Keep living, keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Love,Peace&Craziness
    Mistie kidd
    | Posted on 2010-03-31 00:00:00 | by mistiekidd | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds to me like a pretty emotional piece,i would imagine whoever or whatever it is about the subject meant quite a bit to you...it just sounds like that type of piece...i can definitly say i felt the longing...and by the way,thanks for your words on "untitled"....crazy...
    | Posted on 2010-03-29 00:00:00 | by crazyphreshone | [ Reply to This ]


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