Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: perhaps it's betterdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 737
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 964



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsperhaps it's betterdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Sometimes I wonder
    what is better for us
    Sometimes I sit and ponder
    what future we had for us
    Why it never came through
    Why it seem to be you
    Who felt the need to rib me apart.
    and shatter my already aching heart.

    Perhaps this is better for us
    to see you hate with guts.
    You said you loved me
    But it was really he
    Who had your heart.

    Perhaps it's better this way
    That you hate me today.


    do you remember out kisses?
    How much I miss them...
    Do you remember our time together?
    When I said I loved you forever?
    Do you remember your promises?
    And all the things you said?


    Perhaps it's better this way.
    that you hate me today.
    Our memories will go
    Fly away to the unknown.
    Perhaps it's better this way
    Your hate for me today.




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 00:44:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      girls are mean. sorry. its true. and if i could apologise on our behalf to the entire male species i would. though having said that boys arent entirely without blame too.

    i had a singlet top that said "boys lie" and i was wearing it at a music festival once and there was this boy there wearing a shirt that said "girls are mean" and someone thought we were boyfriend and girlfriend having some kind of arguement with our tops haha! took me all day to work out what people were on about when they'd randomly tell me they'd just seen my boy friend haha.

    anyways.. sorry to be continually linking you to the world but maybe you might wanna check out this:



    i love this guys take on breakups...

    perhaps its better...
    it never seems better at the time but when you are able to look back and see how unperfect it all was then it does seem better. but the first weeks... always suck..

    one time i "fell in love" with a guy at a wedding while i was drinking rum straight [not a very glorious story at all really and not one to be tried again haha] and i think he was my "boyfriend" for about a month until i realised we had nothing in comon... that we were incapable of spending together without alcohol [i never used to drink but its all he ever did and i "loved" him so i would drink too... [girls are pathetic!]] and i was wondering what the deal was when he rings me up and says "hey babe... i think we should be friends..." i was totally fine with that until the next week when i saw him back with his ex-girl!
    who knows why i was so hurt by that considering i didnt really "like" him... you know? but the heart is fickle and crazy and just cannot be trusted really.


    you prolly wanna edit this piece a lil... rib me apart ought to be rip... do you remmeber out kisses ought to be our kisses... spell check it awesome though if the wrong words are spelt correctly then i guess its not as awesome as you'd hope haha!

    what are your views on this poem and this girl now that we're 6 months down the track..? always an interesting thing to revisit...
    | Posted on 2010-03-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    178116

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Convergence written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Faith In Line written by MyPeriodical
    Can't let my demons go written by faideddarkness
    I'm here written by BloodtornAngel
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    On Loop written by Daniel Barlow
    A Fire! A Knife! A Black Crow Calls! written by HisNameIsNoMore
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    All Time Low written by Janesaddiction
    On Top of a Water Wheel written by Wolfwatching
    When Crows Tick on Windows written by metallichick786
    ME written by jjd
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Genesis written by saartha
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Stretto written by saartha
    Limbo written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Dirge of Nostalgia written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Tides of Man written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Last to Walk the Earth written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry