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    dots Submission Name: fading awaydots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 341
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    have you ever looked back without a regret?
    they say things never change, they remain the same,
    But I know you think differently.
    You love to take it all back.
    You once said the words "I love you"
    but it was all a game
    Did you ever mean it? I know I did...
    But still, it was all the same
    Past is past and it should be let go
    I know you never look back
    I'm not even on your mind.
    Just a figment of the past,
    not even worth calling past.
    You'll think I would have known better
    You'll think I would have bee stronger..
    To resist your words,
    to never fall into the game.
    A game of toys.
    Who ever has the most wins.
    Did you win with me in your hand?
    Was I the the valued ace
    that made you win the bet?
    But victory was not enough
    I was discarded, thrown away, tossed away...
    I was no longer needed,
    to you I was worthless,
    And so now you have a new puppet
    But the puppet pulls the strings
    With sex he has you pleased.
    what happened to that evil master-mind?
    where has the wickedness gone?
    I have to say, revenge is bliss.
    You made a trap and fell in it.
    Your life depends on another,it's meaningless now.
    Your once proud life that I adored
    has fallen to an end, it's no more
    Now, I won't be here in your disgrace,
    I'll leave in my own haste.
    With your memory, and of what we were fading away...
    "now you're gone
    I've moved on
    and I don't feel so sorry"
    One day I'm sure you'll look back
    to think of me.
    You'll wonder what happened to me,
    that stupid man that gave you his heart,
    he tried so hard, but he still lost.
    and you'll try to come back,
    but I won't be there,waiting for you.
    I won't be collecting dust for a person like you
    and my memory of you will, as it should be....
    fading away




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 00:48:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That Was Very good. It Showed How Much You Were Hurt. I Kind Of Feel the Same Way. So, I Understand What You Mean. I Love It =]


    Tsukiko -Stephanie-
    | Posted on 2009-09-06 00:00:00 | by TsukikoHamino | [ Reply to This ]


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