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    dots Submission Name: sly little devildots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotssly little devildots
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    Come, another step closer
    Don’t turn another corner
    All those precious moments
    Gone away, thrown away
    And now you only stray
    What are you hiding from?
    Is this what you have become?
    Someone who lies
    And makes empty promises.
    All the things you “hate”.
    It seems that angel I knew has died
    And that thing you “hate”
    You it just ate
    How could you throw it all away?
    And all these lies create?
    Was this all just some play?
    Or a scheme to me irate?


    What did I do wrong?
    Where did I fail?
    Did I sing the wrong song?
    It seems I just cannot prevail
    In the game of love
    But then again, it isn’t a game at all
    There are no angels above
    Even if there were, to earth they would not fall
    So why did I think you were an angel?
    Why did I think you were perfect?
    Yeah….a perfect devil…
    My heart you have wrecked
    And for that I cannot forgive,
    Even if I love you
    To you, more I cannot give,
    After all you put me through
    I don’t give second chances
    And even if you crawl back
    To you I will not give glances!
    Now, my heart is black
    And for that, to you
    I give all the due
    I will not be your martyr…
    I will be smarter
    So, Goodbye my little angel
    Or should I say my little devil?




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 00:51:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      My god!
    Go freaking get your work published! :D
    | Posted on 2010-02-07 00:00:00 | by Aylar | [ Reply to This ]
      ..do you play the guitar?
    if not,
    find someone that does.

    you could be a great lyricist,
    and these words would sound much better
    performed with feeling with some cleverly worked
    Syncopation, than just
    being read from the page.
    think about it. j
    | Posted on 2010-01-08 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


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