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    dots Submission Name: en espanol! :Odots

    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 601
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsen espanol! :Odots

    Mi corazon te grita
    Mis labios mencionan tu nombre
    Pero tu ya tienes otro hombre,
    que te lleva mas ariba
    Y yo no logro alcancarte con mi amor!

    Ya no puedo n dia mas sin ti
    Sin tu a un lado de mi
    mi vida regresa al ayer
    y ya no se que hacer
    Pues, la vida asi duele
    Y mi corazon se muere

    Mi corazon te grita
    Mis labios mencionan tu nombre
    pero ya no se que hacer!
    Solo verte junto a el,
    ya no lo quiero creer!

    Y perdoname, yo me resito a verte junto a el
    Olvidame! Mejor regrasa a su lado otra vez
    Y dejame, a morir con una respidad


    My heart yells to you,
    my lips mention your name
    But you have another guy
    Who takes you higher
    And with my love, I'm unable to reach you

    I can't take one more day without you
    Without you by my side
    My life returns to what it was
    And I don't know what to do
    For life like this hurts
    and my heart begins to die

    And my heart yells to you
    my lips mention your name
    but I don't know what to do
    Only seeing you by his side....
    I don't want to believe it

    Forgive me, I refuse to see you with him
    Forget me, it's better if you return to his side
    and leave me, to die with one final breath

    Submitted on 2009-09-04 00:57:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well I don't speak spanish but I loved the english translation. i can relate. what I like the most is the ending " and leave me, to die with one final breath" it makes the ending have significance. I'd say this is a good piece.
    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]

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