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    dots Submission Name: two that were never finished :Pdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotstwo that were never finished :Pdots
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    sometimes I look back with regret
    and sometimes I wish we never met.
    But days like these,
    where I feel a little tease.
    When you smile upon me
    as it should always be,
    I am reminded at why my heart is divided.
    Between those horrid thoughts were all hope is lost.
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    poem two:the rain pours down
    and my soul hits the ground
    allow me to drown
    and to never be found

    there is no ray of sunlight,
    no wings to give me flight.
    The rain won't clear
    yet I'm still to shed a tear.
    Dark clouds roam about,
    the rain will continue without a doubt.
    When will I get a break and swim out of this lake?
    A lack filled with sorrow...
    and my broken wishes for tomorrow.

    The lake gets bigger
    and my heart says leave her.
    and even though I can't get rid of those thoughts
    I can't help but feel that all hope is lost.
    The rain continues to pour
    Where is my dear Elenoir?




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      Please finish them dann they are beautiful more than i can express through my words
    | Posted on 2010-02-04 00:00:00 | by bubblegumsweety | [ Reply to This ]


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