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    dots Submission Name: a silent prayerdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
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    Dead god, hear my cries!
    Please don't fill me with doubt
    Answer my silent prayers.
    Those filled with salt and tears.
    What did I do so wrong?
    Do I even belong here?
    Dear god, open the gates.
    I don't want to live in so much hate.
    Dear god, where are you?
    I cannot go through
    In this world without you.
    Dear god, don't leave me here.
    I need you, my dear
    Lord, up above.
    Dear god, please forgive me.
    For what I may have been
    Or done, or said
    to gain your hate.
    Dear god, kill me.
    For all my sins
    Through your sword in me
    And spare me the pills
    against depression and pain.
    Dear god, where ever you are.

    Amen




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      silent prayers are the most urgent i think..

    i dont know if you subscribe to faith of any kind or whether you wrote this in one of those moments of aaaarrrrrrggggggghhhhh!! but yeah... this makes me think a whole lotta things that im gonna ramble on about as follows:


    back in the day people used to form these incredible eloquent prayers and pray them out loud so that everyone else could hear them... i dont really think god appreciates those kinds of prayers... god is all about relationship and personalness rather than flamboyant shows of excess nothings...


    i dont know... i could be reading too much into the pills from depression and pain thing because i have been in a situation quite like that but heres my ramble whether its in context or not:

    in 2002 i was in a psych ward for 3 months because i wanted to die and because i had huge panic attacks and couldnt leave my room and i wasnt eating and blahblahblah. my whole life i have been a christian and a crazy enthusiastic contagious kind of girl and people were shocked to see me in hospital and depressed. aparently christians cannot get depressed. aparently its the devil. or theres sin in their lives. or they dont talk to jesus enough. people gave me all kindsa solutions to try make me feel better but none of them would just let me feel like crap and work through my feelings until i felt better.

    i dont know... theres nothing wrong with meds if theyre gonna help balance the seratonin levels which help you to stop thinking thinking thinking long enough to work out whats going on and work through all your feelings.. im pretty sure god created medication too haha!

    i think im sad that your prayer ends with kill me.. its like a reverse psalm to me and i sure hope the situation has passed.
    | Posted on 2010-03-16 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is not a hit on your prayer, only a comment on life (whether or not your prayer is personal or for the general public). I don't think God hates you, I think a lot of people get mixed up with God turning his/her back on them at the worst time possible. I also don't think God wants to kill you...too much messy paper work. What I do think He does see though are chances that he is trying to help, but you cannot see it based on the fact that the "pills" are clouding your everyday judgment. If in fact there is a God and He/She loves us unconditionally, then we cannot be selfish to think that we are the only people out there need help. It takes time and a lot of heart ache to get the right "answer". If this was merely generic and not personal...well sorry, but at least you got a comment, right?
    | Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]


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