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    dots Submission Name: unfinisheddots

    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 496
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       one day...I'll finish this :P

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    Your bitter goodbye
    has left me so distress.
    I can't even get rest
    as the hours fly by
    in the wake of night.
    The moon's light
    Burns my soul; curse the moon
    for reminding me of you.

    Bloody memory, falling away
    Bloody Sunday, happening today.

    You caused me so much pain
    And my cries were all in vain.
    You didn't care, did you?
    You took my blue
    skies and turned them gray

    Submitted on 2009-09-04 01:03:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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