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    dots Submission Name: Goodnight Foreverdots
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    Author: ForestShadow325
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    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsGoodnight Foreverdots
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    As you lay your bloodstained hand on mine, i whisper softly in your ear.
    "don’t worry" i say, "your not dying, only going to sleep".
    You say your scared but i say that your going to be ok.
    "Don’t worry about anything sweet heart, everything will be fine".
    You say its getting colder, darker, and squeeze my hand tighter.
    "Goodnight my darling, ill see you when you wake up". i say
    You say you don’t want to sleep, but i tell you that you have to.
    "Everything will be better when you wake up" i promise.
    i feel you r breathing slow and stop, the grip on my hand released.
    "Goodnight.....i love you" i whisper.
    Goodnight.....Forever...




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