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    dots Submission Name: Anxious!!!!dots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAnxious!!!!dots
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    Count to ten very slowly..now inhale then exhale.
    Seconds seem like an eternity.
    Thoughts are riventing, exploding with passion.
    Thinking in such a fashion hurts so good.

    Painfully awaiting that moment of climax, I'll end up getting 10 speeding tickets to not miss my appointment.
    Muscles lay dorment but get aroused with merely the thought.

    You ought not think of tomorrow but the here and now.
    This is how is going to happen.
    Lot of clapping and slapping.

    Not too hard but just enough to get my point across.
    What point you ask? You'll soon find out.




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 13:46:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what the frell.
    | Posted on 2009-09-05 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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