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    dots Submission Name: Chasingdots
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    Author: wolfgurl830
    ASL Info:    18/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42/38/34
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 458
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1599



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    dotsChasingdots
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    I see my life messed up
    Young and I have a life that could be ruined
    I need a friend that will keep me from being stuck
    I want a future
    And not be a loser
    I donít want to be chasing a future I could have


    Trying to find the life I want
    Trying to keep up
    I donít want my life to suck
    I keep chasing and running
    Running from a better life
    I canít keep chasing my life away


    Everyone wants to be famous
    To be known
    But to be famous
    You might just end up alone
    I'm gonna keep runnin away
    Because my life sucks anyway
    Cause I cant keep chasing
    What I cant get


    Trying to find the life I want
    Trying to keep up
    I donít want my life to suck
    I keep chasing and running
    Running from a better life
    I canít keep chasing my life away


    I need a friend
    And you wonder where people like me end up
    Alone, depressed, without hope
    So instead I get doped
    Cant ruin what you never had


    Trying to find the life I want
    Trying to keep up
    I donít want my life to suck
    I keep chasing and running
    Running from a better life
    I canít keep chasing my life away


    It cant keep going away
    I donít like chasing my life away
    I just want to live a life that I can grab and hold on to
    Cause this chase will have to end
    And I might just lose




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 14:42:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      God, you must be American. Come and live in Australia, we don't give a damn here, everybody is famous an if youse don't have a good time somebody hits you until you do.

    I am wondering whether this is a song lyric, because if it is, it might be a bit un-focussed' that is, it might cover too much ground - tell about too much all at once? Song audiences lose it after about one idea.

    But if it's a literary "lyric", then it is successful except that maybe the verse-form could be more artificial. Even though there are stanzas, mostly six line, which is a good way to organize these expressions, this is still Free Verse not Lyric Verse ... which is really to be criticizing what you called it, rather than what it is, I guess! I mean, I usually like somebody's free verse more than I like their rhyme-and-metre. I think Free Verse is called Free because there is no penalty, neither for writing it nor for reading it!
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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