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    dots Submission Name: Elevendots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    That crimson truck
    Stands in the drive way
    It's the same one she sees
    Every now and than, but today

    She comes in the door
    Pretty red hair in pigtails
    And blue eyes staring up at him
    Anger and confusion of a eleven yr old

    Words that she regretts
    Wish you would just go away
    And now, she doesn't see that truck
    In this lonely driveway, she waits patiently

    She grows wiser and colder
    That blame just getting stronger
    When she stands in that driveway
    And looks to the sky, asking God why

    But she doesn't get an answer
    Knowing Lucifer laughs in her face
    And these scars reminds her of her mistakes

    Nineteen years old
    And she stands by a grave
    Anger rising up, she kicks at the name
    She throws down the flowers and asks why

    She stares up at the sky
    When she drops to her knees
    In a once-in-a-lifetime prayer

    I'm just a eleven year old
    Who said what she shouldn't have
    Who paid with her love and her tears

    She's eleven again
    And she wonders why

    How could they say
    To that one broken little girl
    That Daddy just isn't coming home

    Nineteen...
    And she's still waiting




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