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    dots Submission Name: Not A Child Anymoredots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsNot A Child Anymoredots
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    They turn their nose up in distaste
    Whispers words behind her back
    And surprise strong in those eyes

    She pulls her hair out in distress
    Screams "stop judging me already"

    She complains about the glass
    She has to walk on every morning
    When she falls, she has the scars

    They turn their nose up in distaste
    Shake their head in remorse

    "You're not a child anymore"
    She replies with a snap
    "Stop judging me dammit"

    In every action she takes
    She glances behind her again
    And when everyone turns their back
    That facade, that disquise finally breaks

    She refuses to grow old
    Without wisdom of her own

    You can still be a child at heart
    When you're reaching ninety-nine




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 20:20:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is nice. I love the ending. I can relate to this im not letting go of the child in my heart.

    "She refuses to grow old
    Without wisdom of her own

    You can still be a child at heart
    When you're reaching ninety-nine"




    | Posted on 2009-09-07 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      a very different poem, quite unlike any I have seen before. the idea is not novel, but the way you put it sounds good. all that frustration and the facade idea sounds some what true....
    | Posted on 2009-09-05 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]


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