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    dots Submission Name: Derives from my Eyedots
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    Author: BlueTorcher
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    dotsDerives from my Eyedots
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    My tear has a companion
    That slides down the skin
    Soaking up excess feeling
    Dragging them from within

    Yet one can never erase the past
    Or the look upon a face
    Devastation, hallucination, hope
    All in one
    A priceless picture, a web spun

    Yet to capture
    One would have to be highstrung

    My tear has a companion
    It brims on the edge of my eye
    Slipping but never cascading down
    A raindrop from the sky

    It could be lost within a puddle.
    Consumed by the infectious and still be pure
    Because my tear has a companion

    And isn't it simply lovely my dear




    Submitted on 2009-09-04 20:57:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of a poem I wrote in my teens whilst stoned and drinking coffee with my friends. To me your poem carries this same theme. It reminds me of those first few glimpses of an altered reality that open your mind to new possibilities. Your thought comes like a revelation; you watch it slide down the neon-laser passages deep inside your brain, and embed itself there. To recall it, you must revisit that state of mind. However, chances remain that the revelations you recieved were far too deep for your tender young mind to grasp. You realize you would have learned these things anyway, but far in the future. Now they are like a gift, unwrapped and waiting in the shadows to be opened. You must learn to pursue these thoughts and feelings on your own for them to be truly real and life-changing. The motion of your poetic tear reminds me of a saying I also had while on LSD: We don't mind Tripping, we just don't like to Fall.


    She stands in a sea of petals,
    engulfed in ever-twining life.
    Her face turned towards the sun, eyes shining
    She embraces the presence
    Of peace of mind.
    Then suddenly her thought is lost,
    Like a raindrop on a crystal lake.
    One moment such as this again,
    Would be like honey on her lips.
    But to grasp the hand of ecstasy
    Could not be accidental once more.

    soul-hugger
    | Posted on 2009-09-05 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]



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