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    dots Submission Name: just thinking about youdots

    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       mi amor de mi vida.

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    dotsjust thinking about youdots

    its getting later.
    i know you're asleep.
    its getting darker.
    but my love is growing deep.

    has it always seemed this lonely?
    or is it because you are in my mind?
    my dreams are always freaking me out
    cus i dream you leave me behind.

    i see you for the real you
    the one that you can't hide.
    you got my heart laying at you feet.
    i fell for you quickly even though i didn't try.

    so tell me my darling.
    is your heart now gone with mine?
    i used to have it beating
    but it has disappeared before my eyes.

    california is lost on me without you
    there is nothing i can do.
    my mind just goes on dreaming.
    and thinking about you.

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      Rachi, I can't stop thinking about you either. I love you and will never stop loving you. I couldn't help but feel as if you were perhaps a little annoyed with me for not being on as often. I am sorry. I miss talking with you and I can't wait until you get back. But have fun while you're up there, try to have the time of your life, because once you're back down here, you'll have something to compete with that. I can understand if you may not want me, but your fears may not survive, because there's nobody else for me, not a single person alive.

    | Posted on 2009-09-07 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem and could relate to this alot in many ways. It made me think about the Love I have for my husband, how much I think of him and miss and love him, and dream about him.
    This was a great writing don't let anyone tell you different those who focus only on spelling are not real poets in my eyes.
    Because those who write from the heart see the message that is being displayed in the poem.
    It talks about how you see this person in the poem for who they really are,it talks about her being gone, and true love. I can feel the passion. very great talent you have here and beauty is displayed with many emotions in this.

    Thankyou so much for sharing this,
    | Posted on 2009-09-05 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      lern frelling inglish yus gerk
    | Posted on 2009-09-05 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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