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    dots Submission Name: Mint Chocolate (Fulfill Me)dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 835
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1673



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       yes... written by me. i've had this for a while just never posted it...


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    dotsMint Chocolate (Fulfill Me)dots
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    Her name is mint chocolate
    melts in my mouth
    donít wonder where Iím going
    or question the route
    I was completely hooked
    from the first taste in me
    a sugar fix, look her lips
    form a thirst hastilyó
    sweet caramel,
    Iím nutty for butter pecan
    nutty buddy fudge and honey
    A worthy lover she can
    be or find,
    her mind is sharp
    seeÖ she donít waste her time
    or mind the dark.
    and I felt that very momentó
    I owned itÖ
    and we were meant to lock lips
    even if opponents

    if not-but it wonít- it will be
    because thatís the only way
    to fulfill me

    even though this world
    doesnít pine through, mind you
    lifeís so fast
    Iíve felt itís been a drive through
    you took my breath away
    and with a buzz Iím waitiní
    come quick with your lips
    I need resuscitation
    plus I love debatiní
    with you,
    I donít need to agree girl
    I just wanna kiss you

    if not-but it wonít- it will be
    because thatís the only way
    to fulfill me

    so breathe

    and sigh, and gasp

    release

    is near and Iím you past

    but donít let go
    the fresh snow, melts within my heart
    and the ice box within now
    breaks apart
    a man now rise,
    from the shady kid
    even if he hurt inside
    thatís still just the way he did

    if not-but it wonít- it will be
    because thatís the only way
    to fulfill me





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    ||| Comments |||
      the lyrics are as as good as any other top 40s pop/rap song Ive heard on the morning radios. its very cute and theres somethings just wonderfully upbeat. i think if set to music its definetly something to dance to. as much as food and candy are overused clichťs in music, art, whatever, theres a reason, because the comparison is easy and people can imagine and relate, and when its a song they can bop their heads.

    good work.
    | Posted on 2009-10-15 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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