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    dots Submission Name: Our Story.dots
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    Author: melippg08
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    Words: 1002
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    I see you're moving on,
    I really wish you'd stay.
    But please, before you go
    there's something I must say.
    Have you forgotten what we had?
    The way I made you feel?
    We had something special,
    the love I felt was real.
    I could only hope
    that you'll miss me and remember.
    Did you know we had our first kiss
    on the seventeenth of December?
    Maybe if you thought about
    the way it all began.
    On December seventh
    was the first day you held my hand.
    I met you at a soccer game
    I only saw you as a friend
    But I heard that you had liked me
    Who woulda thought I'd love you in the end.
    We would talk more on the phone
    and then thats when I knew.
    You told me that you loved me
    and I felt the same way too.
    Then on January second
    just when this love was strong,
    I found out you had other girls
    I never thought you'd do me wrong.
    I never cried so much
    the way I did that day.
    My life only got worse
    when I had to move away.
    So I left and was alone
    my heart still loving you.
    You were with another girl
    and there was nothing I could do.
    At times I would think,
    Why am I holding on?
    He didn't want me anymore
    His love for me was gone.
    I tried so hard to do it,
    but I just couldn't let you go.
    I told my friends I was over you
    but the truth, they didn't know.
    A year had passed
    since I had heard your voice
    I had the chance to see you
    but "no" was my choice.
    But I let my guard down and called you,
    and all those feelings returned.
    I would never get over you,
    that's something that I learned.
    I asked if I could see you
    and you said that'd be okay.
    I was so excited
    I was smiling the whole way.
    We were walking towards each other
    and we said hi with a hug.
    Aww you looked so cute
    you were dressed up like a thug.
    I couldn't believe it,
    you were right here by my side.
    When you told me how you felt,
    wow, I could have cried.
    You grabbed my phone and took a picture
    of your hand holding mine.
    I put it on my MySpace page
    I wanted to send you a sign.
    What happend next
    is something I missed.
    Time passed us by
    as we laid there and kissed...
    As I walked back to my sister's,
    I had the best feeling ever.
    I wanted to spend my life with you
    Me and you would be forever.
    There was one more day 'til I had to go back home
    and you left your girl for me.
    You said you'd wait 'til I returned.
    I knew this was meant to be.
    So morning came
    and I had to leave.
    This was four days after
    New Year's Eve....
    But soon my happiness came to an end.
    You thought I had sex with your brother.
    How could you think I would do this to you?!?
    The tears came one after another.
    There was no convincing you.
    For me, you had no trust.
    The place I had in your heart
    automatically turned to dust.
    One month has already past
    And now you're with somebody new.
    You tell her that you love her
    I wish that wasn't true.
    So I survived another month
    and finally went to town.
    I knew you were still with her,
    that really brought me down.
    I so badly wanted to see you
    I didn't think you'd feel the same.
    But when my cousin invited you
    I was surprised you even came.
    So here we were again
    on three/twenty-two.
    When you walked into my door,
    I didn't know what to do.
    This time we didn't greet each other
    with a great big hug or kiss.
    We simply just said "Hi."
    A STUPID lie led us to this.
    After a few hours
    of just sitting and watching tv
    we went into my sister's room
    but words you hardly spoke to me.
    For a while nothing happened,
    we ended up falling asleep.
    I knew you had a girl
    so this secret, I'd have to keep.
    Then when I woke up,
    your hand was holding mine.
    You leaned over to kiss me
    and I was on cloud nine....
    We made out for a while
    Til it was time for you to go.
    When you walked out of my door,
    I started feeling low.
    Even though I was with you that night
    I knew things still wouldn't be the same.
    I missed the love we had back then
    But to you, I was just a game.
    A few days later you told me
    Revenge was why you were there.
    You still believed about me and your brother
    For my feelings, you didn't care.
    After that I got so mad at you
    I couldn't stand to see your face
    I knew this'd be the end of us
    You even blocked me from your MySpace.
    I felt like I was over you
    That made me really glad.
    But seeing you around all the time
    just changed my mood to sad.
    I couldn't help but miss you
    And the way we were before.
    I started to face the truth
    Me&you would be no more...
    So now we talk as friends,
    but we don't talk about our past.
    Nothing is the same.
    I can't believe we didn't last.
    I'm crying as I write this
    with my paper and my pen.
    Hoping you'll read this and think about
    everything we could have been.
    You're a huge part of my life
    And in my heart you'll always be
    Even though it didn't work out
    You're still my favorite memory.




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      This is beautiful poetry.... you rhyme so natural, it doesnt feel forced. and I believe every word.
    I dont know if this is true, but by the way you write it you somehow present yourself just as a character and him as a character. Its the emotion i think that pulls me to relate to it.

    I think you ended it the way it should have ended.
    | Posted on 2009-09-05 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]



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