[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Has Yet To Make Sensedots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 979
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1257


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHas Yet To Make Sensedots

    I try to talk some sense
    But I'm way too tense

    When I'm going around
    Without making a sound

    And they try to stand there
    Without shedding a tear

    Refusal has been given
    When they committed a sin

    I may be from middle class
    But standing on the corner for cash
    Just for you to give me some sass
    Is something I willingly pass

    I will break another nail
    To tell you another tale

    With their cold stare
    They won't even share
    When it wasn't even fair

    And with the aspect of fair
    They try to deem me unworthy
    Even if I seem to want to pay a fee

    Every word they spill
    Their lips seem to seal
    And they don't even care

    As they whisper to their whores
    And the eagles decide to soar
    When the gasoline will pour

    I'm about to end
    Without a letter to send

    And my lovely bride
    Stands on the edge of the tide

    Without a single farewell
    When this story tells a tale

    Now this is my goodbye
    Thank you for being so kind

    Submitted on 2009-09-05 18:55:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]