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    dots Submission Name: My Realitydots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    Description:
       They caught him this time ... what happens if the next one slips under their radar


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    dotsMy Realitydots
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    I am struck
    struck by the grief by this pain
    all those feelings come rushing back

    I am lost!
    I am gone!

    For if you are meant to kill me you will
    If I am meant to leave this world before my mid-twenty's I shall

    I thought I had a purpose
    I thought I was meant to be here

    I lived through all my over doses,
    I lived through that 12 gauge I placed against my stomach
    Most of all I lived through your abuse!

    Now ... My reality has come to a head...

    I may not live through putting you behind bars!
    For if these hit men are successful I will not see what I can make this life!

    Nevertheless please know... I do not hate
    I am the person I am because of you






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