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    dots Submission Name: My Lifedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
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    dotsMy Lifedots
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    I am lying on the sidewalk...
    Slowly I am bleeding to death

    The past 21years flash throughout my mind...
    A failure I am...
    A disappointment.... To say the least
    Drug addict I once was

    This is best for them all,
    I should be thanking you!

    And Yet I am not,
    You took what you could from me as I child...
    Now you are taking what one thing I had left...

    My life!!
    The hit-man snaps a photo, for now he wants to be paid
    As he walks away he spits on me

    I lye beneath the heavens
    gasping for my last breathe

    Now I only live on through this photo...
    Lying there blood all about,
    eyes rolled behind my head...

    My Soul Will Forever Haunt You




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