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    dots Submission Name: Cognitivedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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    dotsCognitivedots
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    You had...
    You had me believing
    I had control
    Within control of this life I live

    But the truth
    My reality
    Came back with a vengeance!

    My thoughts are not as they should be
    My concerns are not what they would be

    No! Thanks to you Sir,
    I am wondering
    Does this man behind me in the grocery store,
    is this the man out to kill me?

    Will this be my last breathe?
    Will today be my last sunrise seen?

    I am now living within a world of
    "What if"
    "Is today my last day ALIVE"

    These are not just questions of curiosity
    They are life or death questions...

    My fear grows... my paranoia is heightened
    Looking all around...




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      As weird as it sounds, I smiled at the end. I don't know why. Maybe because I find myself doing that all the time. Looking around me, trying to sniff out danger as if I were a scared little bunny.

    "These are not just questions of curiosity
    They are life or death questions"

    Probably my favourite lines, just because I find myself thinking that questions aren't ever really idle. Asking the wrong question, or possibly the right question leads you down such different paths.

    I enjoyed this immensely.
    | Posted on 2009-09-06 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]


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