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shining star

Author: joezwells
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this was written some time ago about my best friend who was going through one of the toughest times in her life. she is amazing and pulled through just like i knew she would.

shining star

i see the pain in your eyes
the tears stain your face
collected and confident as you walk a steady pace
your torn and broken and i see it from a far
to everyone else your a shining star
they are blinded and mislead
consumed with what people have said
why cant the take a step back, reread what was read?
the truth isnt hard to see
people only believe what they want to believe
so im sad to say they will probably never see
the truth that lies within, and the pain that cripples you to your knees
but please understand as i watch from a far, that the pain will never dim your light
for you are a shining star

Submitted on 2009-09-07 01:09:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is nice.

when people are in their darkest moments they never see themselves through other peoples eyes... you know?
when youre feeling down and out and cannot work out where to place your next step sometimes you just need a friend along side you to remind you that the left foot moves after the right foot and then the left again...

and that can be done from afar... a smile or a kind word does wonders
and sometimes just knowing that someone else believes in you is all the inspiration a person can need to keep going thrugh what theyre going through

nice sentiment.
| Posted on 2009-09-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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