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    dots Submission Name: His eyes dots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHis eyes dots
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    His Eyes were full of anger
    Confusion , Betrayal, and despair

    Then I happened

    His eyes the first time
    Were so full of tangled emotions

    Now they are full of
    Compassion ,

    The wounds that were unhealed
    Are no more

    The scars unseen are vanquished from
    His soul

    He has given me so much joy
    In the few short days that we have been
    Friends that I fail

    To realize how far I am from my
    Starting point those many years ago

    My eyes are filled with tears every time we part




    Submitted on 2009-09-07 19:27:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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