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His eyes

Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51 /52 /39
Words: 117
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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His eyes

His Eyes were full of anger
Confusion , Betrayal, and despair

Then I happened

His eyes the first time
Were so full of tangled emotions

Now they are full of
Compassion ,

The wounds that were unhealed
Are no more

The scars unseen are vanquished from
His soul

He has given me so much joy
In the few short days that we have been
Friends that I fail

To realize how far I am from my
Starting point those many years ago

My eyes are filled with tears every time we part

Submitted on 2009-09-07 19:27:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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