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    dots Submission Name: The Onedots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 478
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Onedots

    Hold my hand inside your hand.
    I need to be shown the way.
    I want to feel and to understand.
    Never let me go, i need to stay.
    Stand by me..Make me strong.
    Together we are unbeatable..Nothing is wrong..
    Soothe me, comfort me..This i pray..

    Lead the way, show me a sign...
    I want to heal with you forever in time.
    My pain i carry holds back my prime.
    Why do we suffer all alone?
    Building trust gets set in stone.
    I feel you watching from your throne..

    Bleed not for naught.
    Be not distraught..
    There is a great light
    That hears your deepest plight.
    He will lead..
    Comfort you..
    Troubles will fade..
    He will make things right.
    You will see the way through..
    Day will come soon.
    There will be end to night.

    Pray to the great one
    That lives beyond the sun.
    Place your trust in Jesus.
    He will help you pick up the pieces.
    Help will arrive in the long run.
    There will be a return to fun.
    Trust your guidance in The One..


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