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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Dopedealerdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 512
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    dotsMr. Dopedealerdots
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    The man stands poised
    On the corner of the street.
    Never knowing
    Who next he'd meet.
    Always his power is growing.
    He hovers around..
    Feet moving quietly.
    Barely touching the ground..
    Silently he reacts violently
    To whoever should ever cross him.
    He cannot ever thrive without sin.

    He wanders around the street in hope
    Of poor bastards to buy all his dope.
    Hey there mister dope dealer..
    You pathetic machine...
    Sad little life-stealer.
    Can you ever come clean?
    Each day sinking down further..
    How do you cope with all this murder?

    You call the boy next to you your brother?
    You'd no faster kill him
    Than murder his mother.
    If he should ever cross your path
    You would unleash all of your wrath.
    Without blinking an eye
    You'd make your brother die.
    How do you so easily don your disguise?
    And calmly spread your wicked lies?
    Leading many to their demise..
    People only listen to you
    Because you convince them you are wise.

    But you are not wise - not free.
    You set forth the drug-spree.
    Killing our people's potential.
    Misleading our youth softly.
    My my aren't you influential?
    I admire you for sleeping so well..so calmly...
    Tomorrow you'll head again into the sheep
    Taking their souls..For you to keep.

    Sadly i see the cycle repeat.
    A world i would pay to see you weep.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-09-08 05:01:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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