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    dots Submission Name: I feel so...dots
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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 438
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 932



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    dotsI feel so...dots
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    Surrounded by such cess
    How am I supposed to have found success?
    This down I feel sucks in excess
    An' less I can best this rot?
    My next sucess'll be in not
    Continuing on
    An' when you ain't got
    Anything that you want
    Sunlight's fire to the flesh
    And, this dire need for a hire being's the dregs
    Of my life and just what I
    Cling to, I need to, like
    I'm holding my sanity
    Can I be forgiven?
    No banter to my living
    Panoramically even, I see no good
    Damned and banished with these heathens
    I just wanna know I could
    Escape, make/take a new mindstate
    I find my mind hyphy and I'm irate
    I've yet to find anything I like in anything I make
    All my worst fears fill so many of my days
    That everyday is beginning to feel like I'm in a haze




    Submitted on 2009-09-09 02:44:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cling to, I need to, like
    I'm holding my sanity,

    i have to say that I can relate to this entirely at this moment. Truly a scary feeling to have if you have no one to share or support you.

    True honesty!!! Thanks

    | Posted on 2009-10-13 00:00:00 | by GoddessShakti | [ Reply to This ]


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