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    dots Submission Name: Cleaning my roomdots
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    Author: wolfgurl830
    ASL Info:    18/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42/38/34
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 640
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    dotsCleaning my roomdots
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    Cleaning my room is oh so tough
    I hate to pick up all this stuff
    Old fruit and bagels I sometimes find
    I look under my bed
    And hold my nose and pray that this undefined is not mine
    Stinky socks and dirty pants
    I found a nest of carpenter ants
    Now that Iíve cleaned my room
    It will be dirty all too soon




    Submitted on 2009-09-09 07:57:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The most ominous underbed object is the "undefined" ... I feel a creeping sense of mysterious horror. What would it turn out to be???? Are you better or worse than my own daughters were? How old is the banana in the backpack?

    In 1984, I tried to get bananas in backpacks registered by the Guinness Book Of Records, but they reckoned they could not encourage such a practice.
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is neat. it was fun reading. i have to clean my room its a mess.
    | Posted on 2009-09-10 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Very funny. Reminds me of not so long ago when my son was at home.
    | Posted on 2009-09-10 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha nice. You made it ryhme. And its disgusting. I'm curious though. What is undefined.
    | Posted on 2009-09-10 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]


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