I Love You -------------------------------------------
Like a dove slowly soaring high above
so is my head filled with your love.
What honey means to bee
is what you are to me..
I never knew what you'd mean to me
until i saw such soft beauty in thee.
How i love your controlled cool caress
stroking me softly - setting me free..
My sweetest love - my game of chess..
I feel so humbly high smitten atop a cloud..
Your love truly shapes and makes me proud.
I never want it bent or come to an end.
These sacred feelings - my ultimate trend..
I am ever grateful to share with you in full.
Thank you for standing by me and pulling me through.
Bless you my sweet flower for sharing your healing power.
Only thanks and praise i can give for your sweet sharing ways.
My heart knows only you as being true.
All i want to truly say is I Love You.
I see you mentioned reciprication somewhere, that and people not even saying thanks really [censored]/s me off esp the voiders who don't acknowledge you having spent time on there work.
I don't know if you'll thank me for this but it's offered with a good heart and the right intent.
For me this is very rhyme driven with a lot of the phrases seeming unconnected but for the rhyme.
I was thinking the other day about writing a rhyming tutorial: not that I'm the shi/t just that I'm better than a bunch here and have an idea of certain mechanical aspects and trickes etc that help out a lot. I'd suggest you go read on of my sonnets, which is in a controlled meter, or even better go read some famous dudes sonnet and see how they fit the conetnt in and work within a theme while still managing to rhyme. You may notice a difference, and while that's going to be obviouswhen comparing poems against the work of famous guys, our aim should be to make those differences less visable.
I feel this poem could be so much better and would be ifthe rhyme served you, and the lines served the rhyme.