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    dots Submission Name: Pound for Pound, You are my Favorite Twindots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    22/M/SoILL
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 129/81/88
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsPound for Pound, You are my Favorite Twindots
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    I've seen you through an open window.
    How brave!
    How noble!
    How utterly mistaken one can be.

    I've seen you placate yourself among the throng.
    I've seen you find solidarity,
    and distance yourself from the ever angry mob.

    Calling for justice.
    Screaming for satisfaction.
    I've seen you manipulate a love affair
    just for the attraction.
    Just for the distraction.

    Oh, your head is always spinning like a top.
    Round and round, I wonder what expression will set when it finally comes to a stop.

    When deals in the dark,
    finally get shown in the light.
    Well I've seen you blaspheme
    the sun,
    and make tender the night.

    You have affected me in a way that
    is more than profound.
    I've seen your siamese heart,
    I would sell it by the pound.




    Submitted on 2009-09-10 09:35:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WHOA boy! I LOVED this one. Something about its simplicity mixing with the underlying feelings of what I took as almost... resentment. I can not find the words. Excellent piece.
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by Lil J | [ Reply to This ]


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