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    dots Submission Name: introduction...dots

    Author: nwproud
    ASL Info:    27 / vancouver, wa
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 280/243/64
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 979
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       trying to work my way back into es, looking forward to reading and writing once more...

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    a foreign poet impresses words
    without intentions, assumes
    love being for the lucky,
    steals a kiss in the pouring rain.

    how fortunate his remarks
    subtle, intriguing evolution,
    three years from today
    her name simply devastates.

    set apart, a lonely world away
    a box is filled with words
    violent contents, cradled close
    developed in secret, lies and love.

    what poetry his pen commands
    surfaces for purpose, extent
    of dedication, devotion, a mere
    reason to live, and nothing more.

    Submitted on 2009-09-10 16:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I'm so glad to see that you are back on ES. It has been far too long, my friend.

    It seems that time has served you well. Your writing is as beautiful as always, but it seems that(as with wine) your writing has gotten better with time. This is a great piece. I want to re-read it a couple of times and then I will give you more feedback. But, I do want to say that it is a beautiful piece.

    I hope to hear from you soon. I have missed our conversations. There is much to catch up on. A lot has changed, dear friend.

    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]

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