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    dots Submission Name: Raise Your Voicedots
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    Author: Iffy
    ASL Info:    22/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    6.28 - 92/57/43
    Words: 419
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 549
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2675



    Description:
       This is a simple piece with a simple chord structure, meant for piano or guitar. I kept it simple because it's the simple things in life that we always take for granted. Perhaps it's time for a fresh perspective.


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    dotsRaise Your Voicedots
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    Iím sitting in my yard
    Thinking about what Iím feeling
    I can feel the breeze in my hair
    I can hear the geckos on the ceiling
    Iím having breakfast at eleven
    Making my way through a cup of tea
    When suddenly down from heaven
    The rain starts to fall on me

    What are you doing right now?
    In your priceless penthouse home?
    Iíd bet you ten bucks your all alone
    Sitting by your telephone
    Well maybe soon Iíll call you
    Ask you how you have been
    But youíd just tell me what youíve seen
    And all the sadness that it brings

    Chorus:
    Isnít it a shame?
    When we complain
    When there are people with less than us
    Just a few Ks away
    Why must they suffer?
    Why canít they have a choice?
    We spend our days in silence
    Maybe itís time we raise our voice.

    The politicians speaking
    About all our future plans
    Do you notice how everything
    Revolves around cold hard cash
    People ask for favours
    And we say money first
    Are there any saviours?
    Left on Earth?

    There are people on the streets dying
    But no one seems to care
    There are little children crying
    Because their parents arenít there
    And yet weíre all at home thinking about things like
    Why so and so is gay?
    And whether some hot shot star would date you
    Because that would make your day.

    Chorus:
    Isnít it a shame?
    When we complain
    When there are people with less than us
    Just a few Ks away
    Why must they suffer?
    Why canít they have a choice?
    We spend our days in silence
    Maybe itís time we raise our voice.

    Letís not let them hurt
    Letís not let them fight
    Letís not let them fear
    The monsters in the night
    You think that guns will help them
    I think kind words would help them more
    You think war is the answer?
    I think youíre dumber than before.

    Chorus:
    Isnít it a shame?
    When we complain
    When there are people with less than us
    Just a few Ks away
    Why must they suffer?
    Why canít they have a choice?
    We spend our days in silence
    Maybe itís time we raise our voice.
    Oh isnít it a shame?
    When we complain
    When there are people with less than us
    Just a few Ks away
    Why must they suffer?
    Why canít they have a choice?
    We spend our days in silence
    Maybe itís time we raise our voice.




    Submitted on 2009-09-10 21:06:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really sad and touching to read also fills you with hope, this is a simple truth that so often gets ignored. People have all the greatest things and yet they still complain or want more, i dont really understand (or maybe i do) how i can find such happiness in simplicity and still give thanks and you get people that have everything and i mean everything yet they are so reluctant to share or ever say thanks, these are usually the people that lose the true value of life and get caught up chasing false dreams.

    Ok now that ive droned on i can honestly say this is a real powerful message here and it is worthy of being released so it can shed some light for the blind. Thanks for sharing this.

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-09-11 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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