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    dots Submission Name: Please.dots

    Author: Orin
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 93/97/43
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    Show me your world. Take me for a trip through your consciousness. Let's explore what makes you a person, together, just the two of us. Let's fly above the clouds of your imagination. Let's run through the hills of your emotion. Bring me along on a cruise down the highway of your thoughts. I want to know.
    Welcome me with open arms into that which you hold most sacred. Tell me your deepest, darkest secret, and watch me make light of it. Invite me to the places in your mind that you don't go at night. Extend your hand, and let me join you on a trip nobody's ever made.
    You're not someone I've met, nor someone or heard of. You aren't a man or a woman, black or white, rich or poor. In our minds, there are no genders. Our spirits have no genitalia. Our souls have no race. Our ghosts don't make money.
    Show me what it means to be a person. Explain to me the differences of joy and pain. Demonstrate what sets love and hate apart. Tell me why happiness and sadness are not the same. Bring out the contrast between light and dark.
    Do this for me and see what life is truly like.

    Submitted on 2009-09-11 02:57:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There's this inner message that is kept open and yet a secrecy that wants to explore,
    i like the idea of no limitations, no walls, no bounderies and yet a respective honesty.
    Questions that leads to a hoping method where no one can hear and yet they can hear
    only ones that can adapt to the quiteness of your drum. And who knows what that is, only you can dispell. Anyway Good write!!

    Your Friend T.REDD
    | Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by T.Redd | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this was quite insightful, i like it, it's like a short prose that takes you on a wondrous journey, this is good. I like the way you explain things and connect them to things like highways and places. This is really an intreaguing piece as it takes you on a journey of inner exploration. I love how you mention that souls have no genitalia, this is quite true in my opinion. Also that inside we dont make money and we are all the same, that in itself is quite a powerful message. Thanks for sharing this!


    | Posted on 2009-09-11 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]

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