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    dots Submission Name: "Setting"dots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is what i go through when a customer buys a diamond and a ring, then they watch as i carefully set the diamond into the ring.


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    dots"Setting"dots
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    Gently i place the hollow throne
    between leather jaws
    and hammer in
    the timber wedge.

    The stage is set.

    Hungry gyrator
    lowered with precision
    knibbles gently
    when wiggled with care,
    shaping hands
    onto tender golden arms.

    Starry eye
    balanced on pins
    clicks into place
    when pressured.
    It cradles justly.

    Crowd stands silenced in awe.

    Parallel grips
    tightens the embrace.
    Rotating whiskers
    ready the king
    for the baptism of suds.

    Optic glass
    dissects each angle
    for analysis,
    assuring perfection
    upon curtains' closing.

    A star is born.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-09-11 05:30:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Are diamonds really "hollow thrones?" I don't understand...Isn't what holds them the hollow throne?

    What's a gyrator?

    "The stage is set." Cliche, but I don't know what else you'd use. You'd have to dig deep to think of something unheard of.

    "shapping hands/onto tender golden arms." I love the imagery here.

    "Starry eye
    balanced on pins
    clicks into place
    when pressured.
    It cradles justly."

    It seems you always have at least one stanza that makes me catch my breath. ^_^

    "Parallel grips
    tightens the embrace.
    Rotating whiskers
    ready the king
    for the baptism of suds."

    This time, you gave me two breath-taking stanzas.


    "Optic glass
    dissects each angle
    for analysis,
    assuring perfection
    upon curtains' closing."

    I lied. THREE stanzas of the same reaction.

    Ooo! I like the simple, strong ending!! 'Tis true that you have borne a star!!

    I didn't know you had a job with diamonds. How old are you, my dear?

    (My apologies for asking so many questions. I'm just hoping they'll broaden your view and help).
    | Posted on 2009-11-29 00:00:00 | by mojymo | [ Reply to This ]
      Obviously you have a job you love... or all your writings about it would be suicidal. LOL

    I love jewelry, and I love examining it. I know someone who takes vintage and re-makes it, mixes a pile of broken things into 1 stunning necklace or bracelet, but although I admire intricacies greatly, I get impatient with such things, and my hands shake when I concentrate too hard ow on perfection. (I'm hopeless.) But .... kudos to your skills in making beautiful things -- both on and off paper.
    | Posted on 2009-09-15 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Absolutely brilliant. Few can write about minute, trivial things. Fewer yet about jobs. Even fewer can do both well. I am very impressed. Generally poetry is just a bunch of crumpled emotions regurgitated by a mind stuck in a rhythm. This, though, was a work of art. As concise and clean and transparent as the subject.

    I applaud you, good sir.

    Cheers.
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by Orin | [ Reply to This ]


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