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    dots Submission Name: Man of a Thousand Dreamsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMan of a Thousand Dreamsdots

    Man of a Thousand Dreams

    Each is a feathered drip
    Which falls whirlpool
    To its own unrequited bottomless
    Of naked love exposed

    Each a petal comprising the blossom

    Pulled at its stem
    And counting she loves me, she loves me not, she loves me, she loves me not
    In their dandelion clock
    Blown away in exquisite parachutes

    And as seeds they take root in my soul
    But un-watered parch for their growth
    But still sprout the bloom of her name
    And the verdant leaves and stem of remembrance

    Blossom perfect in a single flower

    Each hits as supplicant drops of rain
    Which covert diamonds
    Wet silken expressions of skin caressed
    Sources my trammelled heart
    With an eternal obsession
    On her lower lip

    Audacious the flower rips

    And a thousand twists in its cavalcade
    To rampant and tender dreams
    I whirl dizzy in their wake

    But bent to my blood of aching
    Cannot separate this vocal perpetual
    Of plasma, salt and corpuscle
    In its red velvet fire of desire

    To rip atoms from dimensions untamed

    Each is a headlong drip
    Which hangs present in waterfalls
    To its own cascade relinquished bottomless
    Of naked love exposed

    Each is a petal comprising the blossom
    Of her

    But it is in the shattered damage
    Of her unappeased finger tips
    By hours and seconds and years unrested
    Which drag these dreams to darkness

    And leave me to brood over the beauty of blossoms
    The taste of her scent
    The solitary irreplaceable drip of love
    Which washes the flood of her dreams

    To rip atoms from dimension untamed

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