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    dots Submission Name: Butterflydots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    52 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1727/1248/246
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 68
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 801



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    Butterfly butterfly, greeting the morn
    As the sun, it is melting the dew
    Her beauty divine
    And forever to shine
    Like her colour of crimson and blue

    Butterfly butterfly, dancing in time
    To the wind, as it blows a slight breeze
    Such a queen of the sky,
    And she’s destined to fly
    On the wing, with such elegant ease

    Butterfly butterfly, falling in love
    With a boy who is passing her way
    How they cuddle and kiss
    On a morning like this
    As the flowers all giggle and sway

    Butterfly butterfly, bidding farewell
    As she leaves with her love that she’s found
    The flowers all cheer
    From afar, and from near
    As the butterfly’s head homeward bound




    Submitted on 2009-09-11 17:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I have always enjoyed your writings, I haven't been on in sometime, great to see you are still here! I think this sounds like a song, not sure if you play instruments or not. I think this is beautifully written.

    Keep on writing!
    | Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      graceful on the wing
    delicate as summer's breeze
    joyful butterfly!


    | Posted on 2009-09-30 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      :) I like how the flowers giggle.
    The repetition of "butterfly" is a nice touch, and the images are vivid and beautiful. As always.
    | Posted on 2009-09-17 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty poem, pretty butterfly!
    | Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by PrincessVenom | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem, sounds more like a song to me.. good rhythm!!
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good. I like the rhythm of the lines. I never thought of butterflies falling in love. Nice imagery.
    | Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]


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