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    dots Submission Name: The Poetry of Deathdots
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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsThe Poetry of Deathdots
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    You have to listen now
    Time has come to a close
    There is no wishful thinking

    This is something we have to face
    A peculiar way of coping
    Come to me, I'll take care of you

    Sheer exhaustion has forced us here
    A place we can hide from affliction
    Oh you must know how I adore you

    Don't underestimate me
    Everything about you is on fire
    I'll catch you as jump from the skies

    I'm so violently tranquil
    It's almost time for goodbye
    Oh how you know I love you

    We're both being hunted
    Hearts unraveling only
    to be collected by him

    You must trust the martyr in me
    I will placate everything
    Bringing you to safety

    A desolate right of passage
    Only we can exist here
    You don't have to speak.... I can feel everything








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      even though your whole piece was amazing this line really stood out to me "You must trust the martyr in me." it was like you were speaking to me and i knew that if push came to shove i would trust in you. its always amazing when someones work can make me feel something like that. good write
    | Posted on 2010-12-13 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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