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    dots Submission Name: For His Own Amusementdots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 795
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFor His Own Amusementdots
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    Her body cried out for his touch
    But her mind went against his words

    So the Angels tried pulling her away
    When her lips met his for that last time

    While the Demons complained loudly
    That Heaven shouldn't even affair

    But a young man stepped forward
    And demanded them to back on down

    When they didn't have the right to play
    With a young girl's heart like this

    But another stepped forward
    And decided to challenge the holy

    When things got out of hand
    And her heart on the line

    God demanded Lucifer to back down
    Lucifer laughed and simply replied

    "Why not let the girl.. feel more pain"
    God Scowled at him and shook his head
    "She's not a pawn in your game anymore"

    Red in the face and fire in those eyes
    Lucifer upped the stakes "just watch me"




    Submitted on 2009-09-13 01:26:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A fight between Lucifer & God = God always wins! Don't let love hurt ya hun!
    | Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by PrincessVenom | [ Reply to This ]
      Can you provide any description for this.. I could not really see whats the inner meaning.... .. !!!
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by kavya | [ Reply to This ]


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