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Author: rsujith
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 67 /25 /9
Words: 194
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Do not open your eyes,
The darkness around you can’t offer true light

Do not open your ears,
The sweet sounds are fouled with lies.

Do not grope around in the darkness,
For truth is far beyond your reach.

It lies unknown
In a blind man’s vision,
A dumb man’s speech,
the sounds in a deaf ear.

Truth lies in the heart of a child,
Safe in his mother’s womb,
Yet untouched by the foul world.

And in the heart of a dead man
Who repents for he had done.

Do not trust the hungry child,
Who pleads for a candy
Or the young lad who promises,
Anything for his lover.

Do not trust the greedy heir,
Who demands his share of property.

Or even the old man
who lies in his death bed.

Do not trust me either, for I am
Neither unborn nor dead.

Submitted on 2009-09-13 04:20:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Why haven't I ever heard of you before? Your poems are great. I don't think that you will mind if I add this to my Favorite list. Keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]
  Whoa, this is an awesome poem! I really like this one, I'm gonna add it to my Faves!
| Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by PrincessVenom | [ Reply to This ]
  God!! what a shocking imagination... !!!! That makes me so insecure... but frankly, a really good poem
| Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by kavya | [ Reply to This ]

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