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    dots Submission Name: For Just How Long?dots
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    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    So now thay my face is engulfed in the floor, your clenched fist wedged in the fissures of my heart, have you had enough?
    Or must I clamber around some more; grovel a little at my own expense? Oh because, you need to treat me like a cold-blooded whore?
    Scald and torch my light at the end of the tunnel to wasted dust, knock me down once more. Is that what you're searching for?
    Because I've been cleaved in two before, and heaved aside like the filth you delight in thrusting at my face.
    Or swindled like all the words you hiss into my ear, till all my love is wholly erased.
    Does it fulfill some twisted, perverse mind-trip of your to have my iron-will quivering lifelessly by your own two hands?
    A scheme, the last man stands?
    Yet I won't caper along, loving you into annihilation, as you loathe the grin in my sweet embrace.
    So scrape that smirk right off your face.
    -I've learned true contentment only exists in your memories, nothing is as good as you remember and life never can keep up to pace-
    I'll burn you and these misused memories to the floor, you hate me when I'm all around and cherish it when I'm falling down.
    Go ahead, hate me, I can't be broken.
    One day I'll have had enough, walk right out your door, and leave you frozen.
    And then you'll see, you've needed me all along, like a bittersweet song.
    I've always known, loving you is so wrong.




    Submitted on 2009-09-13 14:05:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this is a very insightful piece. Filled with such hurt and anger... and yet so much intelligence.

    I am left to wonder, why would you stay around to find out if he will hurt you one more time. Why would one stay to endure the pain that this person is causing. Why, oh why, would one put themselves through this. I know what it is like to love someone so much that at first you don't realize all of the bad and when you do realize it, it is that much harder to leave them. I think that once you reach this point of realization, it is then time to move on. Let them know that you wont let them hurt you any more.. that you have had enough and that you are strong enough to leave and not look back. See if they realize that they really do love and need you.

    I don't know if this is from personal experience or if this is something that just popped into your head, but I wish you the best of luck in all that you do.

    You are a great writer and I hope to read more of your work..

    love and blessings.
    longwinter
    | Posted on 2009-09-13 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]


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