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    dots Submission Name: The Unveiled Maskdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 303/257/83
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This poem I wrote for my African- American Literature course. It was an assignment based on the book we read for class "The Devil and Dave Chappelle" by William Jelani Cobb. It's a collection of his essays that covers many of the issues of racism. In this poem, I include the titles of most of the chapters with a brief description of what i thought it meant to me. It;s best to read the book before reading my poem so i highly recommend it.


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    dotsThe Unveiled Maskdots
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    An African- American experience of a decade past
    This book is what lies behind the unveiled mask
    Cobb spits truths about the issues at hand
    A globe filled with problems, racism facing man
    The road ahead of Barack Obama is a rocky path
    Expectations by the white man, can’t be calculated with math
    There is no equality, one nation plus one black man
    Equals racial realities, equals a two faced stand
    Cobb also talks about seeing in double
    In this chapter he predicts a black man’s troubles
    Fear factors terrors in black and white
    Martin Luther had a dream, what a king
    Battles of what’s wrong and what’s right
    The hood- rat theory concerns a debate
    Women in hip- hop womanized everyday
    Stereotypes and clichés won’t leave the white man’s mind
    Violence, slavery, slandered terms unkind
    It’s a man to man war, color being the topic
    Can’t get passed the surface, can’t get through to logic
    In six in one hand, Cobb addresses biblical term
    And the storm that washed a nation, filled with culture
    A hip- hop story told through hustle and flow
    Depicts a pimp who couldn’t pimp
    But hip- hop is no last resort for the dead broke
    Chapter 12 say’s that we’re out of time
    But how late is too late to get back in line
    Changes can be made, ignorance isn’t bliss
    Well…………… at least not like this
    This is America of open doors
    This world is mine, this world is yours
    Only this book has real stories to tell
    This is Cobb’s creation, this is The Devil
    And Dave Chappelle.




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      I will start out with the positive:
    The overall impression is very good. I read "The Devil and Dave Chappelle" a long time ago, so I don't remember it as well as I should. The rhyme scheme words very well. I like that you used quite a few slant rhymes, it makes the whole poem seem less forced.

    To be quite honest, the only thing I noticed that really needs work is the rhythm of the poem. The lines are very long, which can be distracting while reading it. Maybe think about structure, or breaking the longer couplets into quatrains? Just a thought.

    Overall this is an enjoyable poem with a message.

    Keep writing!
    ~Kear
    | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Snarkypoet | [ Reply to This ]


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