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    dots Submission Name: Somedaydots

    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I believe truly
    that someday love will find me
    come knocking on my door.
    But I won't recognize it anymore
    I'll let it keep on knocking
    let the doorbell keep on ringing
    until it goes away.
    I will not let it stay.

    Submitted on 2004-07-20 05:03:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Why not organize it into two quattrains, and also make rhyme the two lines which do not?

    I'm just going to read all your stuff, but will only make one more comment. You go back to 2004, wow!
    | Posted on 2009-12-26 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem, i guess you're afraid to get hurt that's why you keep them knocking, not letting them in, i liked this piece, short but straight to the point.
    | Posted on 2004-08-09 00:00:00 | by latykim | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice poem. once again, it's short, but it doesn't at all affect my opinion of the poem. this is really good; i liked it a lot. Have you been hurt before? And that's why you'll dimiss love when it comes knocking?
    Letting someone take control over your heart is hard and scary, but it's always the best.
    but i totally understand this poem. good job. c'est magnifique!
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by Kalidoscopeeyes | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm... I know this place. Know it all too well. I suspect that under all the hurt, you're probably a pretty sensitive, caring person. Problem is, the greater a person's capacity to care, the greater their chances of being wounded. We don't recognize love because so often it has been used as a bribe, a lure, with-held as a punishment... hurtful people disguised as lovers, wolves in sheeps' clothing. We don't trust love when it truly appears. Well written, maverique. <><
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I wrote it sometime ago,juz after I broke up with a guy I really loved at that time. After him,I'm sort of numb inside. Yes,love can be wonderful, GOBALATA, but like gothicpoet666, I'm not ready to let love into my heart yet. Right now,I'm numb inside. It's like I'm totally empty.
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]

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