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    dots Submission Name: A Perfect Pairdots
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    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1034
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    dotsA Perfect Pairdots
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    Here you are.
    I could stay here forever.
    The moonlight sparkling through tree leaves, illuminating your face like the first of December.
    Despite how empty I am inside, I can stand up to see this dream.
    Iíll lay there tonight,
    And remember your silluette standing in front of me
    My faceless angel.
    I wonít forget to kiss the tulip petals,
    A glimpse of your satin lips.
    Here I am
    If only you could stay forever
    The tear soaked shirt as I clung to your chest, my body broken like summer slaughter.
    Iíll wish you a fair well, the horizon touching your skin across the rippless shore.
    For here I stay,
    Eternally yours.




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