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Submission Name: it's all because of you... i see these cuts.. dots

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Author:	Rubesangel
ASL Info:	16/female/ LehighAcers Fl
Elite Ratio:	2.06 - 8/13/25
Words:	42

Class/Type:	Misc/Serious
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it's all because of you... i see these cuts.. dots

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i love you
i love you
it's my pain in my arm
that shows my love
it the blood bleeding out
i lost you and i shall agian and now i love you even more to the end...........

Submitted on 2009-09-14 13:16:26 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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"i love you
i love you
it's my pain in my arm
that shows my love
it the blood bleeding out
i lost you and i shall agian and now i love you even more to the end........... "

you know i actually used to do this, but not anymore... i actull like how you never relaly rhymed till the end, even then is seemed kinda sporatic, or like a haunting chant... u know? even in the slightest reverb, you can here it especially if you whisper it....

AETLP/TC

| Posted on 2009-09-15 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]

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