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    dots Submission Name: it's all because of you... i see these cuts..dots
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    Author: Rubesangel
    ASL Info:    16/female/ LehighAcers Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 8/13/25
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsit's all because of you... i see these cuts..dots
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    i love you
    i love you
    it's my pain in my arm
    that shows my love
    it the blood bleeding out
    i lost you and i shall agian and now i love you even more to the end...........




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      mmmm.... interesting---

    "i love you
    i love you
    it's my pain in my arm
    that shows my love
    it the blood bleeding out
    i lost you and i shall agian and now i love you even more to the end........... "

    you know i actually used to do this, but not anymore... i actull like how you never relaly rhymed till the end, even then is seemed kinda sporatic, or like a haunting chant... u know? even in the slightest reverb, you can here it especially if you whisper it....

    AETLP/TC
    | Posted on 2009-09-15 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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