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    dots Submission Name: Forever and Eternitydots
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    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    “Do you think we’ll ever be ok again?” A light breeze brushed across her face, ruffling her hair. Her question had broken the comfortable silence, as the setting sun, golden and surrounded by purple and pink sky, left them speechless. Out here with the endless sea of silky green grass, resting against the trunk of a willow tree, everything was so calm, a peace was easy to find. Aodhan looks at her, “Yes. Yes I believe we will. Someday, all of this will be changed, different. But in our hearts, we are always going to remember this place, these moments. That won’t change. Our hearts will never let go of the hope we’ve held onto for so long, and eventually we’ve gotta’ win the fight. It is just gonna take some time.” He smile is bewildering, even in contrast with the glorious setting sun behind him; his smile was like nothing else in comparison. Especially how it made her feel every time she saw it. She looks away this time, a soft tear growing at the crease of her evergreen eyes, “Do you think we will always be together?” There were centuries of heart ache behind that question. His fingers cradle her face, turning her gaze to his slate blue eyes, “Yes. Eyamma, we will always be together. Always. Because even if we are separated by time and space, you’ll always be here.” He takes one of his hands to place it over his heart, her tears spill over now, “And as long as you’re always in my heart, and I in yours. We will always be together, in our memories, stretched across the fortunes of time. And I promise, I will always love you.”




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