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    dots Submission Name: To Decidedots

    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTo Decidedots

    To the pale moons pain
    To the bright suns fame
    I will leave
    I will turn my back from your glory
    Iíve pulled myself from this deliverance
    Iíve gotten past your good sense
    Now that Iíve found it
    Now that my heart has already split
    To nights ceaseless cry
    To days caring reply
    I will take another path
    This was always your story to tell
    So tell it good man
    And let love befall you again
    Let pain forget you
    For that is my place
    To harness the dark thoughts that you have abandoned
    To live in the shadows that you have fled
    Your life will be a legend
    My life will be a shadow
    But never forget
    I have decided
    And you have not

    Submitted on 2009-09-14 13:41:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you should read T.S Eliot's 'Ash Wednesday' if you haven't already...

    'Because I do not hope to turn again'

    This has that same kind of weight to it.

    And this is a seriously unspecified comment. (apologizes).

    | Posted on 2009-10-11 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]

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