When You're Alone -------------------------------------------
It’s amazing the mysteries hidden beneath your skin
It’s amazing the things you realize alone
Reflecting back on your past a numbness wraps around you
Then you see so many things you never would accept
You let go of your pain; of all of your downfalls
You let the darkness surrounding you embrace your sins
You do not cry for the ones you have lost
You do not cry for the things you just couldn’t do
You do not cry from the pain this causes
A small smile tugs at the corner of your mouth
Realizing that time is only an illusion
You know the end of your fate before it comes
Showing you the importance of finding that beauty
You search for within
When you’re alone inside there is an inner peace…
Because you know the demons coming for you
Are really freeing you.
I think this would read better if L3 was:
'Reflecting back on your past a numbness wraps around you'
I think that's more powerful than 'a sort of numbness'.
And I think a little grammar could go a long long way... maybe some full stops, get rid of those unneeded commas, it would help the overall appearance of this.
Submission Name: When You're Alone
